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SCOWLING WRETCH by Crowan SCOWLING WRETCH

If I had a heart I’d wear it on my sleeve
Ballistics and napalm have provided me this wheeze
Puritans and those who are burdened with need,
Suffer unto us dual singularities

Pre cadaverous rigor mortis
There is not a greater tragedy than this
Rigid and plastic before my time
This is a worry that dwells on the mind

Misanthropic angels clamoring in the dark
Searching long for some trace of humanity
Enlightened minds aligned and ready for lift off
The titanic chains of midnight are solid, binding

Walled in heart reinforced by longing
A thousand pleas for mercy, all ignoring
An inevitable pandemic a plague upon the world
Scowling wretch peering into the soul of this girl
Seeing for the first time true worth there
Wanting for one last time to run hands through her hair
In spite of their decrepit and calloused state…
For her, all of his ghosts, he’ll eradicate…

The angels cry when you weep sad…
The devil quakes when you seethe mad…




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Ida Werrett Says:

July 29th, 2008 at 4:01 pm
This is a powerful write but a very sad one, Crowan and it helps me to understand you better.
Ida

zoubairi hassan Says:

July 29th, 2008 at 5:55 pm
i hope that my blog s revelation will not surprise those who were there ,time we were here just alone dying under the beam of the sun is not another plot!!!
arow broken s code has ben necessery when we were fallen in an ambuscade in the full world, for six mounths, of course always under the beam of the great sun
zoubairi zebra ben marley morocco land of martyrs

zoubairi hassan Says:

July 29th, 2008 at 9:46 pm
the 3 factors that we have traitened in the subject of the basic of expression, are regarding only the classical sight, cause if we want to scientifiz our analyses, we must then including psychological factor and political one the psychological remain in the absence of physical beauty, above all,those of faces, acording to the analystes of political psychology, for enctence hitler or moussilini about his short sizeconcerning political factor, he subject work in a condition superior to his ordinary capacities and the result that his inconscious call automatically to the instinct of life that s why we find difference in views and conceptions betwen a political man and an ordinary one, cause the ordinary work with a normal capacity, bu he political man work with instinct of life in which all intelectuel forces are concentred. zoubairi hassan marley morocco link to zobairi8zebra.centerblog.net

yann rolland Says:

July 30th, 2008 at 1:22 am
Sorry, I didn’t get it….

regards

yann

Crowan Says:

July 30th, 2008 at 8:14 am
No need to apologize, my writing does tend to be vague and ambiguous.
Though I did think the message in this wasn’t difficult to discern.
Thanks For Reading

C

Eg0Sum Says:

July 30th, 2008 at 3:55 pm
The writer seems to be breaking down into a rudimentary form via detachment from love, implicit by changing rhyme scheme and the increasingly chaotic, clamoring congestion of words towards the climax of the poem. Interestingly, the piece reminds me of Sherwood Anderson’s Winesburg Ohio, which centers on the idea of a grotesque–the negative transformation of a person as a result of his/her obsession with a truth, which becomes a deformed falsity; when a person holds on to a truth that is unattainable or no longer graspable, he/she withers away to eventual nothingness, a wispy, malformed being. I just question the ellipsis in the final couplet; for instance, should it read ‘weep sadness’, ‘weep sadly’, ‘weep, sad,’, or ‘weep sad (noun)’. Also, is a heart worn on the sleeve so that ballistics and napalm ‘provide’ it ‘wheeze’ as well? Why should anyone want his/her heart deteriorated by nuclear weaponry? Is the heart worn in order to be exhibited, or given a debilitating condition like a wheeze? Please elaborate.

Crowan Says:

July 31st, 2008 at 8:34 am
Well, I the use of Ballistics & Napalm in this piece, neither which is nuclear, to represent and put forth the idea of a conflagration or strife which has wounded the speaker to an extreme degree, eventually being stated as having a wheeze, to indicate illness or sickness. As for the heart he goes on with the idea that he doesn’t have one for if he did it would be sensitive and easily wounded hence worn on his sleeve.

The ellipses in the final couplet are there to serve the function of needing a pause. This is the heavy unveiling of the finality contained in the revelation that “a truth is unattainable”. Yet he still holds her up in an unrealistic grand light, the angels themselves cry when she weeps sad (yes noun) and the devil himself actually quakes along with her when she’s angry. As you said the speaker is obsessed and delusional.

Thank you for you inquiry and comment. Hopefully I satisfactorily answered your questions.

C.

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